Fred sat at the corner of the restaurant, appraising the ring with a diamond on it. From his objective point of view, it was the perfect one for the occasion. He wore a bright white suit matching it perfectly with a blue tie. The colors blended in well with his brown skin tone. He looked breathtaking. Everything was ready, musicians in place just waiting for the signal, Dianne’s favorite food, and a bottle of champagne. Fred had a clear insight into how the night would turn out. He called her.
“Baby where are you. Aren’t you coming?” Fred asked anxiously.
“Calm down Freddy, am out here in front of the hotel. Just crossing over. I will be there in a minute.” Dianne said.
Fred sat down. He tried to state how he was feeling and how he was going to propose to her. The ring in the wine, or should it be in the food or cake or if he should just keep it in his pocket, he could not decide. He sipped his red wine slowly. His wine glass suddenly slipped off his finger crushing on the floor with a deafening sound and some wine soaking his suit. He cursed under his breath while trying to wipe it off his suit. At the same time, just outside the hotel, an accident had occurred.
Everyone rushed outside eager to see what happened. Fred too made his way out curious about all the commotion around. Shocked beyond words, he stood there motionless starring at a lifeless woman in a pool of blood. Dianne was lying there dead on the road. Taking one step at a time with the little energy he had left, he moved towards Dianne’s body and broke down to tears on his knees, something he had never done. His heart was pounding painfully in his chest as he struggled to breathe normally.
He closed his eyes trying to compose himself only to open them and find himself on his bed crying. It was just a dream. He felt so scared and terrified as it was that he had made up his mind to propose to his girlfriend Dianne that evening as they have dinner. It was like a road sign shouting ‘Danger ahead!’ He asked himself what the dream could mean but only came up with more questions than answers.
That day in the afternoon at his friend’s apartment, he recounted his dream to Steve who took it lightly saying it’s just a dream. How can a dream have every detail of how he planned the night to be, that is apart from the accident? Fred could not find an answer to that and Steve wasn’t of any help to his situation. As always, he was being playful as a kitten. Time was running out, it was almost evening.
Back at his apartment, Fred was in a dilemma. Should he cancel the dinner or not? He walked to and fro in his living room trying to think. He was brought back to reality by the ringing phone. It was Dianne!
“Freddy, I am sorry I won’t make it to the restaurant. Can I just come to your apartment please?”
“Or I can come to your apartment. Yes, am coming over!” Fred hung up, took the ring, and off he went.
The two had been dating for two years. Fred was taking a bold step. He did not know how to show Dianne how much he loved and cherished her but thought that the proposal would say it all. At least his dilemma for the day was solved.
“Diane, will you marry me?” Those were the first words he said when Dianne opened the door.
Looking down at him, kneeling on one knee with a diamond ring in his hands, she did not know what to say as she stared intensely into his chocolate brown eyes. She was wrapped in their warmth as tears rolled down her cheeks. Fred was confused. He did not understand what he did wrong. It was supposed to be their happy day.
‘Why is she crying? Is it because she is happy or is it because…no no no.’ All sorts of questions raced through his mind as he stared back at Dianne waiting for the unknown. At last, she finally spoke. Breaking the intense eye contact, she turned her back to Fred and inhaled deeply.
“Freddy, I love you and you know it. I would do anything to marry you, to be with you for the rest of my life…”
“Then just say yes. Why are you crying like…”
“Am sorry Freddy but I have to say no.”
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12 thoughts on “THE PROPOSAL: PART 1”
This is such an amazing read. I love anything that has to do with love. I absolutely love, love so whenever I see things like this, it just puts a smile on my face. I will be sure to share this article with my partner as she is just like me. Thank you for this wonderful article.
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Wow. This was breathtaking. I mean, the story was so captivating. For some reason, it took me right in and didn’t let go. I guess it’s just the notion that it kind of resembled me and my wife, the story of us. The details differ but the idea is the same. With one crucial change which is that she did say yes. But I’m excited about where this story is going next. I’m wondering why did she say no. What is there? If she loves him? Yeah, I’m looking forward to it. This I really enjoyed. Thank you.
Glad you enjoyed it. If it drew you right in then it means I did a good job as a writer lol. Thank you
The story is very wonderful and sad. We are left with many unanswered questions. Why she said no if they love each other. And the dream is very strange, perhaps the dream contributed to it ending so badly. However, all true loves seem to be sad and end up not ending properly.
This is just the beginning. Stay tunned for more
The marriage proposal is such a big event in our lives and I enjoyed part 1 of your story. You definitely had me reading every word to see if he would go ahead with the dinner but then it all changed. Somehow I didn’t think that he should have blurted it out on her doorstep (it doesn’t make for a nice family story but I’m a romantic). My husband made sure in many conversations that I would say yes when he proposed as he was pretty nervous. It was a lovely time for us in Bali and he said some beautiful words.
Great story, can’t wait for Part 2.
Will be publishing part 2 soon. Your proposal sounds like a good story to tell. I wanted to do something unexpected and surprising. Glad you enjoyed it.
This is a great story and what a cliffhanger!!! I went in search of part 2 but it doesn’t appear to post yet. I imagine this is how any man feels when he’s going out onto a cliff. Wanting to make it perfect but terrified about what can go wrong. I can’t wait to see how it turns out! In the meantime, I’m indulging in another story you have put up here: “My First Love”. And I’ll be back!
Yeah, I am pretty sure most men are very nervous especially if you are not sure if she will say yes. I’ll be posting part 2 pretty soon. Hope you enjoy it as much as you did part 1. I’m sure you’ll enjoy the other story too.
Oh my gosh, this is so exciting, why does she not want to marry him then? I am so curious about the next part! Is it coming out soon? What a cliffhanger haha! I love these stories, please write more 😉 . It is very intriguing to me, the reasons why people want to marry someone or not, even though they love someone. I am very curious about her reason not to want to!
Yeah, sometimes people love but have to overcome something in order to take the next step I think. I haven’t taken it yet lol. My readers’ curiosity is what makes me happy and keeps me writing. Posting part 2 very soon.